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Counting Heartbeats

.deRElict. 13.02.2003 - 18:54 465 5
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	1 person in my life i think about,
	2 gether with you, and you allowed
	3 days ago i told you how i feel
	4 you. 

	5 seconds later you responded,
	6 words telling me that we are bonded.
	7 you want to see me again - i will w
	8 if you need time -- aber bitte sag nicht
	9 .

	i'm counting heartbeats while you're away
	i'll stop counting if you stay.

semteX

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n1... really nice

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lieb und gute idee, auch wenn dadurch vielleicht die tiefe etwas leidet. "how i feel for you" klingt etwas komisch für mein empfinden, "what i feel for you" klänge für mich englischer.

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how i feel for you
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what i feel about you
afaik ;)

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bis zu 7 gefällts mir - dann gleitet es ab in die deutsche-schlager-kitsch-richtung. schade, denn der anfang verspricht mehr, als das ende hält.
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